McGonigle


 * John McGonigle **

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**The Wooden Door: What Really Happened to Juliet?**

Juliet’s Death Opening: Romeo and Juliet is a Tragedy written by Shakespeare. It is about two star-crossed lovers, who fall in love at first sight, and move through their relationships rather quickly. The end of their love is a result of both of their deaths. Both Romeo and Juliet died in peace with one another, and subsequently ended the ever longing feud between the Capulet’s (Juliet) and the Montague’s (Romeo). With that being said, Juliet’s death was influenced by many things, but mostly Friar Lawrence. Friar Lawrence is to blame because of his plan, his deceitfulness, and his cowardly behavior.

you need to mention friar lawrence a little earlier, and try and smooth out the sentences, it sounds really choppy.-will Not very good start, overall needs improvement.- Jax Get your statement out there first with all the stuff you want to say.- chip
 * //Thesis statement could use a little more argument and statement. Make sure that your intro touches on the subject of all three body paragraphs. (Burge)//**
 * make a larger argument and try not to sound so passive (julian)**

Body 1: Friar Lawrence is up to no good, and it is evident throughout the entire play. When Juliet comes to the friar to consult him on what to do about the wedding, he tells her to go home and consent to the wedding. //"Hold then, go home, be merry, give consent/ to marry Paris"// (4.1.89-90). This not only shows he’s deceitful, but also that he is trying to influence others to lie too. Here, the friar is holding one of the biggest secrets, and is neglecting to tell anyone. Therefore the friar is disloyal, untrustworthy, and debatably a liar. Unfortunately, that was not the only time Friar Lawrence reveals he’s deceitful and not telling the truth. The Friar says this when talking to Paris about when, where and why the wedding is. "//I would I knew not why it should be slowed"// (4.1.16). Friar Lawrence, despite knowing of the marriage does not tell anyone. Because of this, he is turned into a wild card of sorts, and everyone thinks he is helping them, when in reality he doesn’t really know what he is doing and intern screws everyone up. Friar lawrence doesn't technically have to be evil, it's just that he could becowardly and could be scared about what would happen to him.-will Quotes not very descriptive, but good ideas.-Jax describe your quotes more **DAVID** this is pretty good Mac but check you topic sentence stay on the topic. -chip
 * try to use some more complex words and dont call frier names and lier unless you support it with more evidence(julian**)
 * Link this stuff to your thesis. How does it lead to R+J's deaths? (KD)**

Body 2: Friar Lawrence’s next major flaw was his plan. To say the least, it was an accident waiting to happen. Just before Juliet’s and Paris’s marriage, Juliet goes to see Friar Lawrence, and he gives her a poison that will put her into a heavy sleep. "//Take thou this vial, being in bed, / and this distilling liquor drink thou off, /… Now when the bridegroom in the morning comes to rouse thee from thy bed, there thou art dead"// (4.1.93-4, 107-8).This is showing the friar planned to poison Juliet in his plan, in order to make her seem dead. This goes to support the fact that Friar Lawrence did not have a solid and well-devised plan. Interestingly, the potion Friar Lawrence gave Juliet was "distilling liquor", even though she is only 13 and under aged. Furthermore, Friar Lawrence makes another crucial mistake when creating his plan. When the friar is telling Juliet of the plan, he also mentions he will notify Romeo of it (the plan). //"Shall Romeo by my letters know our drift, and hither shall he come"// (4.1.114-5). This is confirms that the friar did not think out his plan before he established it, because he decided to instead directly tell Romeo, he would mail him a letter. On top of that, the friar did not even directly deliver the letter, and instead gave it to another friar. This could have been he difference between Romeo and Juliet’s death, in that since Friar Lawrence did not deliver the letter himself, he had no sense of knowing if it arrived safely. This lead straight to Romeo and Juliet’s death because Romeo did not know Juliet was actually sleeping, not dead. yes-will very confusing, neaten up ideas- Jax strenghten your explanations **DAVID** keep structure and explain better. -chip
 * your just adding quotes to get points. you need to explain each quote or otherwise it will make your paper tedious and confusing (julian)**
 * //Back then everyone drank beer because it was cleaner than water becasue it is distilled and all the germs are boiled out. Friar had no way of knowing that the plague would spring up, it if fate that did that. (Burge)//**

Body 3: Friar Lawrence’s final defect is his Cowardliness. He, knowing he’d broken many rules, does not want to be found out. Once, Romeo accidentally poisons himself, he gets scared and decides to flee the scene. "//Come go, good Juliet, I dare no longer stay//" (5.3.159). Friar Lawrence blatantly states he is going to leave, showing he can not stand up and take the consequences as is. Interestingly, Juliet is braver that the friar, because she is asked many times to come with him and run away, but instead decides to stay, and ultimately kill herself. In addition to this, Friar Lawrence reveals once again that he is not going to stay a ‘serve his time’ for his mess up of a plan. When Romeo died, Friar Lawrence did not want to be found out for his wrong doings, so he instead tried to run. //"A greater power than we can contradict/ Hath thwarted our intents. Come, come away"// (5.3.153-4). In doing this he was abandoning Juliet and leaving her on her own. This really shows he is a coward because Friar Lawrence is worrying about himself before Juliet, who just lost her husband and woke up from a 10 day coma. In addition to abandonment, Friar Lawrence is focusing on his fears prior to that of the fears of the only two (or in this case one) people/person he has been trying to aid throughout the entire play.

explain your quotes better **DAVID** i agree with kevin.- chip
 * //He doesn't accidently poison himself, he does it on purpose. You wouldn't want to take the responsibility of two minor's deaths would you? (Burge)//**
 * need to explain quotes julian**
 * I seem to recall something like this is class. Link quotes to thesis. (KD)**

Conclusion: It is obvious that Friar Lawrence is not a reliable, safe person. He was deceitful, not to mention a liar. Furthermore, his plan was inane and [|idiosyncratic]. Sadly even he knew his plan would not work, yet he decided to go through with it anyway. Moreover, it is evident Friar Lawrence is not the bravest of men. He is without a doubt a coward. He is constantly unsure of going places, afraid of what’s around the next turn. Not to mention, when Romeo dies, he plans on abandoning Juliet in her tomb. Friar Lawrence always is afraid of being caught for his wrong doings. The friar is not a stable man, and should never have bee trusted.

Yea what he said ^ yes-will yea what they all said...-Jax your conclusion connects all of your paragraphs. I think that your paper is good, but you need to strenghten your quotes more. Dont change your thesis. Period 3 Home Page
 * //What evidence is there that the Friar would know that his plan would not work. No plan in that situation could have been foolproof and he came up with the best one he could in the short ammount of time that he had; don't be so rough on him. (Burge)//**

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