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 * Jonathan Leung **

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Shakespeare shows through Romeo that masculinity is needed in a relationship and if it is not present, many aspects of a relationship will go amiss. Romeo’s childish actions ruin his marriage and eventually lead to his death. 5, 1, 34 “Well, Juliet, I will lie with thee tonight” · Wants to kill himself too quickly · Thinks only about love like a girl and doesn’t think about what could be going on  ·  If he was more masculine, he would have lived on and lived the best life · Would have moved on 5, 3, 168 “Then I’ll be brief. O happy dagger, / This is thy sheath; / there rust, and let me die.” · Because of Romeo’s stupidity, Juliet dies too · They could have lived together · Romeo forgets all about the original plan and wants to kill himself, therefore killing Juliet Romeo shows many aspects of being a woman when he should be physically and emotionally powerful to keep his “family” together. 2, 2, 158 “O for a falc’ner’s voice, / to lure this tassel-gentle back again: · Juliet is controlling Romeo · Romeo has no authority and cannot even control his own wife · Juliet is the man of the family and Romeo is the tool 5, 3, 119 “Here’s to my love! O true apothecary! / Thy drugs are quick. Thus with a kiss I die.” · Takes drugs like a woman · Doesn’t die in a manly way · Shakespeare is showing that all will end if people don’t take control of their lives Mercutio and Tybalt would be alive if not for Romeo’s femininity 3, 1, 93 “Why the dev’l came you between us? / I was hurt under your arm” 3, 1, 119 Staying for thine to keep him company! / Either you or I, or both, must go with him. Romeo is too feminine to hold his marriage together and everything falls apart because him. // (Conclude Essay) //
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 * Romeo didn’t take control and fight Tybalt
 * Mercutio took his place and was hurt because Romeo couldn’t fight himself
 * If Romeo had some authority, he could have stopped the fight
 * Romeo gets mad all the sudden without thinking things over
 * He takes control in a bad way and doesn’t handle things like he should
 * Romeo ‘s life ends because of this one simple mistake
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Jonathan Leung 3/22/09 Period 2 R&J Essay **__ The Man without Control __** Shakespeare shows through Romeo that masculinity is needed in a relationship and if it is not present, many aspects of a relationship will go amiss. He shows that people need to have masculinity to bring in authority and take control of their lives. Romeo has no masculinity and all of his life comes apart. He acts just like a woman and has no way of keeping his life together. He and his wife both die along with Mercutio and Tybalt. Romeo has no control over his life and Shakespeare is trying to say that no masculinity in a person is horrible. If Romeo had some sort of masculinity, he would have been able to be with Juliet until they both had died. We should all follow this example and remember that we all need some sort of masculinity in our lives. Romeo’s feminine actions ruin his marriage and eventually lead to his death. Romeo has no way of controlling his actions and acts too quickly because he lacks the maturity to control himself. “Well, Juliet, I will lie with thee tonight” (5.1.34). Romeo is going to kill himself while lying next to Juliet. He doesn’t think that Juliet would want for him to live on. Romeo just goes and kills himself without even thinking that Friar Lawrence could have given her something. Romeo doesn’t remember that he was supposed to wait in the outside town no matter what. Romeo makes too quick of the decisions. If Romeo could have waited a little bit, he would have been with Juliet forever. “Then I’ll be brief. O happy dagger, / This is thy sheath; / there rust, and let me die.” (5, 3, 168). Because Juliet finds this dead body, she also wants to kill herself. If Romeo could have kept himself together for a couple more hours and asked Friar Lawrence what actually happened, then he could have figured out why Juliet is having a funeral. Instead, Romeo loses his cool and feels so sorry for himself that he goes and kills himself by Juliet’s body. He lacked the masculinity to keep himself under control and to wait to see what was actually going on between Juliet and Friar Lawrence. Romeo shows many aspects of being a woman when he should be physically and emotionally powerful to keep his “family” together. Shakespeare is trying to show that you need to have aspects of masculinity if you are going to be the man of the family or your family will fall apart. “O for a falc’ner’s voice, / to lure this tassel-gentle back again:” (2.2.158) In this quote, Juliet is talking to Romeo about how to call him back. Juliet is the master, controlling Romeo and telling him where to go. Romeo is a tool compared to Juliet and lacks the masculinity to control her and tell her what to do. She is the smart, sensible, masculine one, while he sits around doing whatever she says, waiting to get into the bird’s nest. “Here’s to my love! O true apothecary! / Thy drugs are quick. Thus with a kiss I die.” (5.3.119) This is another instance where Romeo shows aspects of being a girl. In most plays in Elizabethan England, the girl committing suicide would drink a poison to be quick and painless and the man would stab himself, dying a bit more heroically. Romeo is the woman, yet again, letting Juliet stab herself to be reunited with her loved one and he takes a small poison like a little wimp. Juliet controls this marriage and when she is “dead” for one day, Romeo goes and commits suicide. He didn’t have the masculinity to live on without his loved one or to even die in a manly way. Romeo’s femininity leads to the death of Mercutio and Tybalt. The deaths of both of these close relatives lead to the end of his marriage as well. “Why the dev’l came you between us? / I was hurt under your arm” (3.1.93) After Mercutio dies, everything sets in motion that leads to the eventual death of Romeo and Juliet. Romeo was deficient of the masculinity to stand up and fight Tybalt. Mercutio took his place to preserve the honor of his closest friend, and ended up dying for him. Maybe the fight would have ended in a draw if Romeo had not blocked Mercutio’s view and gotten Mercutio injured. All the same, Romeo was short of the masculinity that a normal man would have and Mercutio died trying to show that Romeo still had his masculinity. “Staying for thine to keep him company! / Either you or I, or both, must go with him.” (3.1.119) Mercutio has just been killed and Romeo is going to kill Tybalt without thinking about the consequences that are coming his way. Romeo’s life virtually ends because of this mistake. Everything that unfolds during the course of the last two acts could have been avoided if Romeo had handled this in a manly, calm, manner. Romeo is too feminine to hold his marriage together and everything falls apart because him. Time and time again, Shakespeare shows the things that could and would go wrong with the lack of masculinity from the man of the family. Shakespeare portrays Romeo as a woman with no control and miniature emotional bursts when the time comes. Romeo is a great example of what will go wrong, but his life sin masculinity is one that we should all avoid.

Comments- This essay has good quotes that help the arguement. Many of the quotes have good explanations, but a few of them have explanations that are unrelated. It is also good because every quote directly connects to Romeo being non-masculine. Also he has a good thesis.-Jack Haha good title and good thesis. parts were a little confusing but otherwise it was good-zack

Nice title, and good essay. Explanations are mostly good, and you stay on topic. Nice job overall on this, even if it seems a bit short. But, that could be just because of the large font. -Dean

Great essay, your first paragraph is very good. The first two quotes and the thought behind them are very well though out. It looks like you really put some good thinking into this. Your quotes are definitely a high point, but I think although the first paragraph brings up a good point, it doesn't really have to do with masculinity in the orthodox sense. Your conclusion is very good though, but I think your very last sentence could be changed a bit. - colin

Great essay, you had a great thesis that summed up your paper extremely well. All your quotes fit your topic and you did a great job writing your paper. I think that you might want to choose one side rather than say that you need a little masculinity in you. Overall great paper though. (Jason Fromal)

Completley agree with Jason, you had a great thesis and you backed it up very well with your quotes and arguments. I completley agree with you about how feminine Romeo is. Good job.(Niels)

If you are gonig to talk about Romeo being a tool you need to tell us what a tool is. In the first paragraph you said that Romeo was impacient, what does that have to do with being masculine? You said that Juliet was masculine compared to Romeo but yet she killed herself when she saw that Romeo was dead. Juliet did the same thing as Romeo but yet shes still masculine. Good quotes but you need some better explaining. (Harrison Butker)

You had a thesis that you stuck to throughout the whole essay. I agree with Harrison, what does impacient have to do with being masculine. You could fix this problem by further exlplaining yourself with this argument. But overall you had good quotes with good arguments. -CB

Good quotes, and nice job with your thesis. Great paper. -ryan

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