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 * Robert Wilkins **

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Juliet's death is the direct cause of Romeo’s recklessness and immaturity. Romeo’s selfish impulsive actions get Juliet, he, and several others killed. In the say we see that he is little more than an entitled child who makes bad decisions that negatively affect everyone around him.
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add detail Ditto (McGooglez) I think that your thesis is a good one. It is debatable, and the scope is nice. DAVID This is a good thesis but try and shorten it-geeza
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Romeo’s impulsive decisions always lead to someone’s death. We see this clearly when Mercutio is killed. //“Why the devil came you between us? I/ was hurt under your arm”//. (3.1. 104-105) The first death of many, Mercutio dies when Romeo carelessly hampers him during the fight against Tybalt, causing a mortal wound. We also see the love as religion imagery when Mercutio mentions the devil to Romeo, although Romeo loves Mercutio and Romeo was only trying to help. This relates to Juliet’s death because if Mercutio lived, Tybalt would have lived, Romeo wouldn’t have been banished, etc. This is not the only time where we see Romeo’s impulsiveness end up killing people. Another example of Romeo’s impulsive stupidity comes near the end of the play when he says //“then I defy you, stars!”// (5.1 26). Thinking he can beat fate, he takes his own life after killing Paris even though he could have waited in Mantua a little bit longer instead of planning to kill himself. This stunt caused his own death, along with Juliet’s, and Paris’ too.

__Comments:__ good but don't try to relate everything as "what if"-geeza good summarizes a little (McGooglez) elaborate on your quote explanations. DAVID


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Fate can also be blamed for the unfortunate events in the play; however fate is not a person, but an explanation used to rationalize all the things that happen. Still, we see Romeo try to get the best of fate, but ends up causing more death, in this case, Juliet’s.//“O, I am fortune’s fool!//” (3.1. 142) “Fate” in the play is much bigger than Romeo thinks. Although he was doomed from the start, we still see Juliet’s death is Romeo’s fault when he tries to best fate instead of submitting too it like we see here. Shakespeare relates the dramatic irony in the play with fate a lot, as Romeo does not he is already destined to die. Fate made Romeo cause Juliet’s death with his actions. This is not the only time Romeo tries to best fate. Right before he dies he says //“Will I set up my everlasting rest,/ And shake the yoke of inauspicious stars/ From this world- wearied flesh. Eyes, look your last!”// (5.3. 110-113) Romeo died trying to best fate, again with his impulsiveness, and ended up killing Paris //and// causing Juliet’s suicide in the process. Romeo’s lines mention stars, which symbolize fate, and everlasting rest means death.

__Comments:__ good job incorporating symbols into your essay-geeza good mention of symbolism and themes more detail some summarizing, good through. Also first sent. sounds like a quote (McGooglez) you connected fate well to the thesis. DAVID

good conection to the thesis and good opening sentance- julian
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Finally, Romeo’s choice of friends also played a big part in Juliet’s death. Romeo’s friend choices influence his bad decisions and also fuel his impulsiveness. //“One desperate grief cures with another’s languish:/ Take thou some new infection to thy eye,/ and the rank poison of the old will die (1.2. 51-53).// This quote is said by Benvolio when he is trying to get Romeo to go to the party where he met Juliet. This began the chain of events that causes the six major deaths. Benvolio does what Romeo does to Mercutio. He had good intentions, but ended up sealing the fate of a friend. Friar Lawrence is also a “friend” who causes Juliet’s death.//“Then is it likely thou wilt undertake/ A think\g like death to chide away this shame/ That copest with death himself to scape from it:/ and if thou darest, I’ll give thee remedy.”// (4.1. 74-77).This quote proves Friar Lawrence is a shady man and bad friar who wanted to protect his reputation. He does try to think of a more godly way to deal with Juliet’s problem because his own mess is catching up with him.

__Comments:__ good job on finding the perfect quotes for the paragraph-geeza good (McGooglez) once again good job connecting your thesis DAVID explain the quote itsel better-julian
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Romeo’s selfish impulsive actions get Juliet, he, and several others killed. In the say we see that he is little more than an entitled child who makes bad decisions that negatively affect everyone around him. __Comments:__ add more to the first opening paragraph -geeza this is the same as your thesis statement (McGooglez) elaborate. pull the reader in. DAVID In conclusion, Juliet’s death was the result of Romeo’s impulsiveness, bad choice in friends, and misunderstanding of fate.
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__Comments:__ way more detail in conclusion. Nice job just ad a little more detail. More detail (ditto) (McGooglez) elaborate a bit more DAVID add more detail in the conclusion-geeza

---  Robert Wilkins  3/18/2009  Period 3  __ Romeo was the Direct Cause of Juliet’s Death __   Juliet's death is the direct cause of Romeo’s recklessness and immaturity. Romeo’s selfish impulsive actions get Juliet, he, and several others killed as you can see in the examples below. In the say we see that he is little more than an entitled child who makes bad decisions that negatively affect everyone around him.  Romeo’s impulsive decisions always lead to someone’s death. We see this clearly when Mercutio is killed. //“Why the devil came you between us? I/ was hurt under your arm”//. (3.1. 104-105)  The first death of many, Mercutio dies when Romeo carelessly hampers him during the fight against Tybalt, causing a mortal wound. We also see the love as religion imagery when Mercutio mentions the devil to Romeo, although Romeo loves Mercutio and Romeo was only trying to help. This relates to Juliet’s death because if Mercutio lived, Tybalt would have lived, Romeo wouldn’t have been banished, etc. This is not the only time where we see Romeo’s impulsiveness end up killing people. Another example of Romeo’s impulsive stupidity comes near the end of the play when he says //“then I defy you, stars!”// (5.1 26). Thinking he can beat fate, he takes his own life after killing Paris even though he could have waited in Mantua a little bit longer instead of planning to kill himself. This stunt caused his own death, along with Juliet’s, and Paris’ too.  Fate can also be blamed for the unfortunate events in the play; however fate is not a person, but an explanation used to rationalize all the things that happen. Still, we see Romeo try to get the best of fate, but ends up causing more death, in this case, Juliet’s.//“O, I am fortune’s fool!//” (3.1. 142)  “Fate” in the play is much bigger than Romeo thinks. Although he was doomed from the start, we still see Juliet’s death is Romeo’s fault when he tries to best fate instead of submitting too it like we see here. Shakespeare relates the dramatic irony in the play with fate a lot, as Romeo does not he is already destined to die. Fate made Romeo cause Juliet’s death with his actions. This is not the only time Romeo tries to best fate. Right before he dies he says //“Will I set up my everlasting rest,/ And shake the yoke of inauspicious stars/ From this world- wearied flesh. Eyes, look your last!”// (5.3. 110-113)  Romeo died trying to best fate, again with his impulsiveness, and ended up killing Paris //and// causing Juliet’s suicide in the process. Romeo’s lines mention stars, which symbolize fate, and everlasting rest means death.  Finally, Romeo’s choice of friends also played a big part in Juliet’s death. Romeo’s friend choices influence his bad decisions and also fuel his impulsiveness. //“One desperate grief cures with another’s languish:/ Take thou some new infection to thy eye,/ and the rank poison of the old will die (1.2. 51-53). // This quote is said by Benvolio when he is trying to get Romeo to go to the party where he met Juliet. This began the chain of events that causes the six major deaths. Benvolio does what Romeo does to Mercutio. He had good intentions, but ended up sealing the fate of a friend. Friar Lawrence is also a “friend” who causes Juliet’s death.//“Then is it likely thou wilt undertake/ A think\g like death to chide away this shame/ That copest with death himself to scape from it:/ and if thou darest, I’ll give thee remedy.”// (4.1. 74-77).This quote proves Friar Lawrence is a shady man and bad friar who wanted to protect his reputation. He does try to think of a more godly way to deal with Juliet’s problem because his own mess is catching up with him. <span style="mso-fareast-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: Calibri; mso-hansi-font-family: Calibri;"> In conclusion, Juliet’s death was the result of Romeo’s impulsiveness, as we see when he acci bad choice in friends, and misunderstanding of fate. He also directly caused the deaths of Tybalt, Paris, and Mercutio. The story would not have been a tragedy had Romeo not participated, however then there would be no story at all. <span style="mso-fareast-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-bidi-font-family: 'Times New Roman'; mso-ascii-font-family: Calibri; mso-hansi-font-family: Calibri;">

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