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 * Dean Yaniger **

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Friar Lawrence is the man responsible for the death of Juliet Capulet, because he takes the marriage and its problems too far, he also takes it too fast, and finally he leaves Juliet to her death. __Comments:__ Friar Lawrence doesn't leave juliet to her death, he tries to persuade her to come away from the tomb and not kill herself. (zander) I agree with your statement, had friar lawrence not left Juliet by herself at the tomb she would not have had the opportunity to kill herself - colin Friar Lawrence is actually a pretty smart man, as I said up above. He gives some excellent advice pertaining to Romeo and Juliet: “Wisely and slow, they stumble that run fast.” (2.3.94) He says this to Romeo when he is talking about Juliet, and how he wants to be with her. This is probably the best piece of advice that the Friar gives anyone throughout the entire play. It’s simple, and all its saying is that you should take things slow, because bad things will happen if you act too quickly and you will have some problems later. While this is great advice, Friar Lawrence forgets it himself very quickly. If he had remained true to what he said here then maybe all the deaths and problems of the future could have been avoided. While this advice could pertain to many mistakes that the Friar makes, one of the most significant and easy to avoid ones happens not 12 hours later. Friar Lawrence marries the pair (Romeo and Juliet) in secret, and tells neither family about it. (Paraphrase of 2.6) This would have been so easy to avoid! It also would have kept both of them from dying, and might have even prevented other tragedies in the play as well. All the Friar would have had to do would be to say “No, I’m not going to marry you two.” Sadly, the Friar had some alternative motives besides the happiness of Romeo and Juliet. He thought that the marriage of the two houses (or at least people from the two fighting houses) would stop the feud, and maybe bring some peace back to Verona. This did work in the end, when they are looking at the **__corpses__** of Romeo and Juliet. Maybe his goal did get accomplished, but they had to die for it. He really should have just thought it through more and then he might have come to the conclusion that marrying high up people in two feuding houses in secret was perhaps not the best idea, and could lead to tragedies and problems.
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__Comments:__ What you say is biased by the fact that we know what will happen, but how could he know the future? (zander) the last sentence entirely sums up the paragraph. (zander) Good quotes but some of them prove the opposite position-jack your quotes are good but some of the explanations seem to kind of divert off topic a bit, and some of them even tend to counter what you're trying to prove. The second major problem with Friar Lawrence is that he lacks common sense. In the paragraph above, I described how he should have thought through his actions at the very beginning a bit more. Failing that, he should have at least realized that when 2 people died the plan was getting a bit too serious and dangerous. He also should have realized that he could have bailed out of the plan at any time by telling the Montagues and the Capulets about the marriage. Here’s a quote from after the deaths of Mercutio and Tybalt: “Art thou a man? Thy form cries out thy art…Tybalt would kill thee, but thou slewest Tybalt: there art thou happy.” (3.3.111, 137-8) This proves that Friar Lawrence knew of the death of Tybalt, and he knew that Romeo was the one that killed him! He also may have known that even though Romeo didn’t kill him, Mercutio was dead as well. 2 deaths should have been enough to make the Friar realize that this plan was simple going too far. He should have just stopped it there and confessed about all of it. But, he doesn’t, and thus the plan keeps rolling along. Even if he lacks the common sense to be able to perceive 2 deaths as a bad and serious thing, he still could have realized that the whole “Juliet fakes her death with a poison” was pretty crazy, unreliable, and stupid. “Tomorrow night look that thou lie alone, let the Nurse not lie with thee in thy chamber. Take thou this vial, being then in bed, and this distilling liquor drink thou off, when presently through all thy veins shall run a cold and drowsy humour; for no pu lse shall keep his native progress, but surcease; no warmth, no breath shall testify thou livest; the roses in thy lips and cheeks shall fade to wanny ashes, thy eyes’ windows fall…and then awake as from a pleasant sleep.” (4.1.91-106). This quote is Friar Lawrence’s instruction on how to use the poison. The plan just getting too dangerous and complicated, especially when you think about how violent and suicidal R and J are. If one of them was to find the other dead, then they would kill themselves. Romeo finds her “dead”…the rest is self-explanatory. If he hadn’t stopped the plan before when everyone was dying, then this would be another excellent opportunity. And, he fails to take it again. If only he had abandoned ship and turned them in, he could have saved them.
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__Comments:__ you don't need to talk about the above paragraph because the reader already read it, and this doesn't take more than a few minutes to read. everyone knows that romeo killed tybalt, that's why romeo was banished. (zander Good explanation-jack His third problem, and the final one I will discuss in this paper, is that he left Juliet to her death. At the very end of the play, after Romeo has killed himself over Juliet’s “dead” body and she wakes up from the poison-induced slumber, Friar Lawrence steps into the Capulet’s burial chamber. “Thy husband in thy bosom there lies dead; and Paris too. Come, I’ll dispose of thee among a sisterhood of holy nuns. Stay not to question, for the Watch is coming. Come go, good Juliet, I dare no longer stay.” (5.3.155-9) Once he walks in, he sees Juliet sitting there cradling her dead husband’s head in her hands. Paris’ corpse is also next to her on the ground, and even though Juliet didn’t love him, she didn’t wish death on the man or anything like that. Friar Lawrence, after saying this, makes another genius decision to flee the scene. . And, of course, she kills herself with no one to stop her. This next (and last) quote will show that Friar Lawrence is even indirectly responsible for the death of Juliet, as well. “Unhappy fortune! By my brotherhood, the letter was not nice but full of charge, of dear import, and the neglecting it may do much danger.” (5.2.17-20) Friar Lawrence had written a letter that told Romeo to hurry back to Verona, and also informed him that Juliet would appear dead. Unfortunately, the letter never managed to get to Romeo, so he didn’t know that Juliet wasn’t actually dead. Romeo, upon hearing that Juliet had died, rushed back to Verona and killed himself over her. Then she woke, and killed herself since he was dead. __Comments:__ Good relating quotes back to thesis-jack very good paper over all, but I think your thesis leaves a little to be desired. The quotes are good with very detailed explanations, although I think you could summarize them some and make them a tad more relevant - colin
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Friar Lawrence is the man responsible for the death of Juliet Capulet, because he takes the marriage and its problems too far, he also takes it too fast, and finally he leaves Juliet to her death. He seems a pretty smart and well read character at first, and I really think he is. He’s able to make various potions and poisons out of herbs and things like that, and he is a holy man as well, so he can’t be evil. He’s just hypocritical, he lacks common sense at few **crucial** parts in the play, and he acts too quickly without realizing the full repercussions of his actions until after they are done. First, we’ll talk about how he is a hypocrite.
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__Comments:__ you mention hypocrite twice, its repetative. (zander)

Friar Lawrence has many problems, and they all contributed to Juliet’s eventual death. Hopefully we can all learn from these mistakes, and try not to act like him. We need to have common sense, a sense of truth, and we need to be able to stop people from doing things as well as being able to get things done. That concludes my paper on how Friar Lawrence killed Juliet Capulet.
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Funny ending and ties back to intro-jack __Comments:__ The thesis fits the paper well. I really liked how you said that Friar Lawrence caused Juliet's death because I think that it really was his fault. The quotes work and they all help to give a better meaning to your topic. Your conclusion is also very well written and helps to sum up your whole argument. Great paper. (Jason Fromal)

The moral to the story is overkill, and the "that concludes my paper" part is unnecesary. (zander)

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Good thesis statement and you opened up a great argument. Very good quotes and you explained them thoroughly and completely. The only negative is that you need to make the paper a little more formal. Try to take a the number “2” and actually spell the word two out. (Harrison Butker) =====

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