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 * Robert Howell **

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By showing the obvious role reversal between Romeo and Juliet, Shakespeare is trying to say that men need to be more masculine. __Comments:__ It's good and catchy.(Reid Calhoun) This is good but does not hilight three topics for your body paragraphs- Henry Quillian Short simple and strait to the point. Good introduction to what will hopefully be a good argument. -Wylly Killorin
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Romeo and Juliet’s relationship is the exact opposite of the normal boy girl relationship in many ways. It is customary for the woman to take the man’s name but in this play, Romeo says he will take Juliet’s name. “I’ll be newly baptized. Henceforth I never will be Romeo.” In this quote Romeo states that he will change his name to Juliet’s instead of the other way around. This is the exact opposite of the way things usually are. Many times throughout the play Romeo bows to the wishes of Juliet like in this quote, “I have more care to stay that will to go come, death, and welcome Juliet wills it so.” Romeo is staying and risking death just because Juliet tells him to. __Comments:__ Yeah. Tell it like it is. this is good.(RC) You need to explain your quotes alot more and may I mention that line breaks and citations are needed. -HQ I'll like how you highlight the main point in of the theme of masculinity. - WK
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In many instances, Juliet is portrayed as a more masculine character than Romeo. Juliet has a much more heroic and masculine death than Romeo, “Here’s to my love! Oh true apothecary! Thy drugs are quick.” Romeo has a very quick and painless death. Juliet, on the other hand, kills herself slowly and painfully with a knife. Earlier in the novel Romeo suggests that Juliet has made him less valiant, “O sweet Juliet thy beauty hath made me effeminate, and in my temper softened valor’s steel” __Comments:__ Dang. Dude you are good at writing.(RC) My God Robert where are your explinations? you didn't even bother to give explinations for the second quote. It's a shame that you have such great quotes but fail to put them to use.-HQ You need to shed some light on your quotes plz. - WK
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One could argue that Romeo is making himself more effeminate so that Juliet will have sex with him. In today’s society this is portrayed as masculine. His relationship with Rosaline shows a lot about the true character of Romeo, “She will not stay the siege of loving term, nor bide th’encounter of assailing eyes, nor open her lap to saint-seducing gold.” Obviously, this quote is saying that Romeo has no real feelings for Rosaline he just wants to have sex with her. Earlier in the story, Romeo loved to fight with the Capulets but after he met Juliet he no longer would. This is just another example of him bowing to her demands. This is evidence that he is not just pretending to be effeminate but that he actually is. He stood by and let his friend get in a fight with someone else over Romeo. Then he got his friend killed by trying to break up the fighting. Juliet probably never would have known if Romeo had gotten in a fight but he didn’t anyway. Instead he bowed to Tybalt, "I do protest I never injured thee, but love thee better than thou canst devise, till thou salt know the reason of my love; and so, good Capulet, which name I tender as dearly as mine own, be satisfied.” In this quote Romeo is trading his family for the Capulets. This is wrong because usually the woman goes to the man’s family. __Comments:__ The middle of this paragraph seems kind of cluttered. You need some punctuation around there. (RC) I dont know what you are trying to say. first you comment that he is just pretending to be femminent and then in the middle you say that he is actually femminant. what is the point of this paragraph?-HQ This seems like your most important argument, you should find more ways to express your argument.-WK
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