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 * Tommy Pastor **

//Paste the appropriate portion of your essay in the spaces below. Note: we may not have enough time to post every part of your essay even though there are sections for each.// Tommy Pastor A.K.A. “Tommy Want WINGYZ!” 3-2-09 Period 2 Romeo, The Unmanly Prince

Romeo shows that he is not a man by his mood swings, his actions during the fight, and by changing the gender roles. This is because Romeo’s love for Juliet often causes him to act like a woman. He even offers to change his name, even though the girl usually does that. Romeo is very moody during the play. He fell in love with two people in a very short time so he is not very stable emotionally. Also, during the fight he basically steps away and lets Mercutio die. A real man would’ve told Tybalt to leave because there is no reason for violence.

Comments: role reversal is a big theme throughout the play (zander)

Romeo represents a girl by changing the gender roles during the play. A perfect example of this is in the famous balcony scene. Juliet loves Romeo, but doesn’t want to take things too fast. Romeo’s love clouds his mind and he doesn’t plan everything out. Those who go too fast will stumble, and Romeo is surely trying to go fast. Romeo’s flurry of emotions forces him to say something very unmanly. “Call me but love, and I’ll be new baptized; henceforth I will never be Romeo.” (2.2.50-51) During the balcony scene, Romeo and Juliet discuss the insignificance of names, and Romeo suddenly offers to change his last name to Juliet’s last name. Obviously, the girl in a marriage usually changes her name to the man’s last name. Another example of Romeo being portrayed as a girl is when Shakespeare likens him to a falcon getting lured in to the hunter. Some people say that the hunter is Juliet, suggesting that she controls the relationship. Along with the balcony scene, Romeo acts unmanly by drinking poison. Once again, Romeo gets too emotional about his love with Juliet. This quotation captures Romeo’s feelings when he decides to purchase the poison. “Come, cordial poison, go with me to Juliet’s grave, for there I must use thee.”(5.1.85-86.) Taking poison is traditionally what girls do when they want to kill themselves. He never stopped to think about the situation, and he frequently changes the gender roles when he acts without thought. Romeo has mood swings and unsteady feelings almost like a teenage girl. This is apparent when he makes fun of Tybalt along with Mercutio, and then suddenly starts loving Tybalt. “I do protest I never injured thee, but love thee better than thou canst devise, till thou shalt know the reason of my love; and so, good Capulet, which name I tender as dearly as mine own, be satisfied.”(3.1.61-65) Romeo makes no sense to everyone else in the scene because they are wondering why Romeo loves Tybalt. First of all, no one there knows that Romeo and Juliet are getting married, which would make Tybalt and Romeo cousins. Second, Tybalt only wants to fight, he isn’t seeking out Romeo to have a love fest. Romeo is acting like a girl because a few scenes earlier he was helping Mercutio make fun of Tybalt. Romeo’s unsteady feelings apply to his love matters too. This play happens in a very short period of time and Romeo falls in love with two girls. In the beginning he said that no girl could have Rosaline’s beauty. He changed his mind at the first sight of Juliet. This quote is a reminder of how mood Romeo is with his love affairs. “Did my heart love till now? Forswear it, sight! For I ne’er saw true beauty till this night.”(1.5.51-52) Romeo sees Juliet for the first time at Capulet’s party. He wonders himself why he loved Rosaline. Romeo is unmanly because his emotions control his thoughts, especially in his love affairs. emotions control everybodies thoughts. (zander)

Romeo didn’t do anything when Tybalt challenged him to a fight. This is because he is too in love to act like a man. Romeo doesn’t step up to Tybalt’s challenge, and his decision resulted in Mercutio’s death. For some odd reason, Romeo tries to fend off Tybalt by feeding him love. “Tybalt, the reason that I have to love thee doth much excuse the appertaining rage to such a greeting. Villain am I none; therefore farewell, I see thou knowest me not.”(33.1.55-58) Romeo does not realize that he needs to step up and act like a man. Tybalt wants to fight, and Romeo needs to do something about that. Later, after his friend had been slain, Romeo realizes that his inaction was costly. “My very friend, hath got this mortal hurt in my behalf; my reputation stained with Tybalt’s slander-Tybalt that an hour hath been my cousin. O sweet Juliet, thy beauty hath made me effeminate and my temper softened valour’s steel!”(3.1.101-106) Romeo, angry at Tybalt, points out that Tybalt would’ve been his cousin in an hour. He states that Juliet’s beauty has caused him to act like a softy. Romeo realizes that his love for Juliet has made him unmanly, but it is too late after he kills Tybalt. All in all, Romeo is shown as a weak-minded character that portrays female qualities. His main problem is his obsession for Juliet. He is willing to do anything for Juliet, even if doing so makes him look like a woman. Romeo takes poison, offers to change his name, has mood swings, and backs down when a challenge is presented. All of this evidence leads to the conclusion that Romeo is unmanly. Good Thesis Many good quotes with okay explanations, but some explanations could have addressed more aspects Good relating quotes to thesis-Jack

Good Thesis with supporting evidence -Jonathan Link some of the 3rd paragraph things back to the 1st paragraph. Might help -Jonathan

The thesis was well written and summed up what your paper was about. Some of the 3rd paragraph could of gone into the 1st paragraph like Jonathan said. Also all of the quotes fit the topic. You could have explained them all a little more though. Overall great paper. (Jason Fromal)

Your thesis needs to have an argument. role reversal is a fact in the play. (zander)

Very good thesis, but make it more openionated - Jonesy

This was good because you linked your thesis with the rest of the paper. Also you used the word mood and moody a lot, you might want to get a new word. But all of the quotes and arguments were really good and convincing. You stayed on topic well and overall nice job.-CB

Some of the quotes have good explanations, but some of them seem a bit irrelevant. You might want to re-read through and ask yourself if the quotes really are the best choices. They are good, but I think they could be better. The thesis was linked to the paper very well and everything was on topic though, so it was good in that regard. Some words you repeat LOTS, maybe try going into word and finding all of words that you use a lot and replace some with something. - colin. good job though overall Your thesis needs to be arguing something. (NIELS)

Good paper, nice thesis, but work on your quote explanations a lttle bit. -ryan


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