Velasquez


 * Jonathan Velazquez **

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Many small events lead up to Romeo’s death and could be considered the cause of it. One of the main reasons is the feud between the Capulets and Montagues. __Comments:__ where is it man- chip nice thesis statement, i like it. **oh that right you dont have one (McGooglez)** good, but are you going to go into detail about the many things that could be considered Romeo's cause for death, if not, just leave that part out, but very good besides that-will
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Many small events lead up to Romeo’s death and could be considered the cause of it. One of the main reasons is the feud between the Capulets and Montagues. If Romeo and Juliet weren’t members of the families that are in the feud then they would not have had to hide their marriage which became the death of both them. “Tis but thy name is my enemy”. This is said by Juliet and ends up being Romeo’s enemy instead.
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needs work- chip Ditto to chips comment (McGooglez) You need to go into more detail, and also, give more examples and quotes.-will


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===Tybalt’s death was one of the events that set everything in motion. “Stand not amazed, the Prince will doom the death”. This is directed to Romeo for killing Tybalt and is the reason Romeo is banned from Yugoslavia. Another event that occurred that might not have caused the death of Romeo but certainly foreshadows it is the death of Mercutio. “A plague a’ both houses” is said by Mercutio to the Capulet family and the Montague family when he is dying. This foreshadows the many deaths of family members in both families ===

__Comments:__ Needs more quotes, but good-will Could use some Quotes.- chip overall nice, oh BTW GET A BODY PARAGRAPH (McGooglez)

A metaphor which is said about Juliet by Lady Capulet is “Death lies on her like an untimely frost”. This can be taken as; people who are close to her die which is true about Tybalt and Paris, and especially Romeo. The final thing that actually caused the death of Romeo was the poison given to him by the apothecary. “Such mortal drugs I have, but Mantua’s law is death to any he that utters them”. This causes the death of romeo. __Comments:__
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cool, this one is really good, but maybe make it longer.-will

Many small events lead up to Romeo’s death and could be considered the cause of it. One of the main reasons is the feud between the Capulets and Montagues. __Comments:__ good-will
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nice nice (McGooglez)

Romeo death was the result of many mistakes made by him and Juliet but a lot of other events may have set everything in motion. Romeo’s death is considered a tragedy to both us and Shakespeare and that’s the way Shakespeare intended it to be. __Comments:__
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who would have wanted it to be, Romeo or Shakespeare? Clarify a little more, cuz it's confusing. Dittz (Ditto) (McGooglez)

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